To revise this paper I would only focus on a few things: elaborating, adding visuals, increasing detail, and finally make it a better read. I would elaborate on things such as "a helping of ice cream". Who knows how much that is? It could completely throw off the balance of the dessert if too much or too little ice cream was added. As far as increasing detail, I would try to make the whole process more interesting, but I am having a hard time trying to figure out what to do. I think that visuals will add to this piece significantly. With any kind of recipe a picture of what the final product should look like after every step helps a great deal when someone is trying to imitate it. I was also given advice on how to make this paper better. They identified everything that I thought needed to be changed so that makes it doubly important to make these revisions.
Tyler VanLandingham
Marina Ramos
How to make a Chocolate chip cookie dough ice-cream Tamale
Tamales are a very delicious Mexican dish. They are usually made with cornmeal and beef or chicken inside, but we are putting sweet desert spin on the classic tamale. This is a very simple and easy dish to make. Anyone can do it. All you have to do is follow the ten easy steps below! We decided to try making a tamale but with something new and different.
Step One: Buy a Pillsbury brick of chocolate chip cookie dough
Step Two: Roll it out to a thin layer to about 1 centimeter thick
Step Three: Layer the top of the cookie dough tortilla with rainbow sprinkles. This will add that required crunch the food critics’ love. It also adds color so its presentation is more appealing to the kids
Step Four: Put the newly sprinkle covered tortilla in the fridge.
Step Five: Scoop 4 helpings of vanilla ice cream into a medium sized bowl.
Step Six: Add 1 teaspoon of vanilla extract. This will bring out the vanilla flavor in the tamale which is the central focus. Add two tablespoons of sugar in order to get a sweeter taste than the normal ice cream.
Step Seven: Use a whisk and stir the ice cream until it is light and fluffy. If desired add one tablespoon of food coloring and mix until the color transformation is complete.
Step Eight: Take chocolate chip cookie dough tortilla out of fridge. Place the ice cream concoction on the tortilla in a lump at the center of the tortilla.
Step Nine: Wrap the cookie dough tortilla with the ice cream inside until the ice cream is surrounded by the tortilla.
Step Ten: Reinforce the wrapped tortilla with a Nerds Rope. To do this, place the tamale on the top of the Nerds Rope. Next bring both ends of the rope and tie. A shoelace knot is preferred, but you can tie it however you want based on experience.
Keep in freezer until you want to serve. Let tamale sit for 3 minutes before eating for best softness.
ENJOY!!!
Hey Ty,
ReplyDeleteDig deeper and cite your draft in your reflection. Again, check out those sample reflections from Caroline and Dan H. that I mentioned.
Ms. Basko