Still More 7 Deadly Sins!!!!!!

I have been working on some new conclusions for my 7 deadly sins paper. I used two different techniques for these conclusions.  By learning about these new techniques I was able to see the flaws in my original conclusion. Basically I was beating around the bush a little bit. I wasn't using good techniques like summing up my paper effectively or recommending a course of action for the reader.
The first one is recommending a course of action for the reader.
       While there is still time, Americans need to get their acts together. We can no longer act this way amongst our society. Not only is there no reason for it, It hurts our country as a whole. We spend more time getting angry at other people instead of focusing on our own behaviors. If everyone made a small effort each day into changing their behaviors, then our society would get along much better. Please, try and change; while there is still time.

The second conclusion is a way of summing up the main points of the paper so the reader can get a greater sense of the most important parts you wanted to focus on as a writer.

     Anything can happen anywhere, and without warning. Sometimes things can happen when you least expect them to. I mean, who would have thought that the seven deadly sins could be committed on a golf course. It seems almost impossible, but its true. Not only does it happen on a golf course, but everywhere else too. People commit these crimes of sin on a regular basis and most of them don't even know it. This just goes to show you how screwed up our society is and how we need to fix this problem.